Peer Reviews

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MegaMix: When I first started to read this paper I was blown away by the vocabulary. The introduction includes a strong thesis and grabs the reader's attention. The organization of the paper was planned out very well. I like how the sectioned the paper out with the different topics. The topic is very clear and supported extremely well with much information from outside sources. Very few spelling and punctuation problems could be found throughout the paper. I like how they picked Africa as their main focus when they describe how to maintain sustainable development. I like how they thoroughly go through each step on how to improve Africa. The delivery on this paper was great! This paper was the most interesting paper to read and I will remember it more than any of the other ones. The conclusion wrapes up the paper extremely well. I give this paper an A.

Generational Gaps: The introduction grabs me right off the bat. I love it! The paper is well written with great language and has details that support their topic. The thesis is clear and to the point. The focus on their topic is kept, the always stay on course. Each paragraph is well developed with much logic and they have great transitions that help the paper to flow adequately. Outside information was used and cited within the paper. Organization was kept but the conclusion is weak. I am not sure that this paper fulfills the assignment because it doesn't talk about sustainability. I would give this paper a B+.

Sustainable Communities: Throughtout this paper I found an adequate thesis and a topic that was well defined. Transitions from paragraph to paragraph helps the paper to flow well. Each topic is supported and backed up reasonably well. I believe that they could look up evidence of where people are trying to improve their communties. Add some quotes, find articles that were in the newspaper, or even place in a narrative somewhere. The introduction grabbed my attention and the conclusion wrapped up the paper great. The best part of their paper is towards the end where they talk about communties being livable and life in a livable community. The little things like punctuation, spelling and sentences fragments are not seen very often throughout this paper. This paper is organized and deserves a B.

Sara Jane

Remix of Sustainable Communities

Remix of Generational Gaps